Anxious and Agitated :D (Poetry Dice 3K25 entry)
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Agitated & Anxious
Burning with rage
Terrifying fury and hate
How can I survive?
Hanging on a limbo
Perplexed and dejected
Why even be alive?
Invested all my dreams
Loved to the extreme
How can I fail?
Nightmares do not end
Memories taunt again
Deception prevailed.
Trust is fragile
Broken at once
Can it ever mend?
Heart still thumps
Even when broken
Working till the end.
Justice not served
Creates a restless soul
Why so remote?
Vengeance ablaze
Blinding rage
Welcoming death’s cloak.
We've been travelin' on this weary road
Sometimes life can be a heavy load
But we ride, ride it like a bullet
Hail Mary, hail Mary
We won't worry, everything will curry
Free like the bird in the tree
We won't worry, everything will curry
Yes, we free like the bird in the tree
We runnin' from the penitentiary
This is the time for we liberty; hail Mary, hail Mary!
Ms.Cerdan
Prince Ital Joe
I ain't a killer, but don't push me
Revenge is like the sweetest joy next to gettin' pussy
Picture paragraphs unloaded, wise words being quoted
Peeped the weakness in the rap game and sewed it
Bow down, pray to God, hopin' that he's listenin'
Tupac Hail Mary
I like the flow. This is a twisting and turning trip.
Thank you kindly mam Robyneggs :D
Deep words.. Nice one kuys! ❤
Thank you kindly sistah :D
Sa malolos na pla ung meeting sa 17 sistaaah.. 😂 See you! Pakurot ahahaaha!
Di ako aabot, picture picture na lang kayo. Gang 9 lang daw e 10 pa labas ko wala ako aabutan :(
Awesome flowetry @twotripleow !! I can feel the feels in this one... and the tupac refrence had me hooked. I use to play that song often. You the real MVP bro. Keep up the great work! <3
Karma never misses, so take what you can get and give it all away, every darkness has its day until you make a way out of no way in sight. Faith it till you make it and watch your dreams take flight. Space Stace out! <3
First of all thank you for showing love on my page home girl I do appreciate that. I'm the MBP Most Ballinist Player and I make my own move call me the mayor lol just kidding. Seriously I'm no MVP lol you're the MVP Stace you're rocking the mic saw your freestyle on the RAP MSP channel hehe. You the friggin best!
@twotripleow, appreciated the effort you put into conveying the difficulty that comes with trying to express the balancing edge these emotions of anxiety exist in. Not an easy task, and I feel you did a great job of reflecting such in your poem, mate, great job!
fun read, my good sir, and love your Tupac reference at the end here.
Thank you kindly. I'm blushing! It took me 7 hours(English is my 2nd language) when I made this, watched the Hail Mary video 4 times, read a Maya Angelou quotes over and over. So yeah I'm dealing with anxiety and depression every night it's hard for me to sleep early. I wanted this longer but I don't have much time,ya know If I had a great imagination like Authorofallthings or Geke The Slayer of Poems I can do better hehe.
Hey mate, I'd say that this is a piece that creates a strong connection with the reader - even if English wasn't your second language, I can see all the work that went into the piece and feel the emotion; now, know that it is your second language, I'm completely blown away!
I could never write something so strong in my second language, and I think other writes would agree.
Not only that, but I've looked over some of your older posts, all the effort you put in and research really shows - you've definitely gotten better!
Can't wait to see where more time brings your writing, @twotripleow, knowing both Inna and Geke, I think you might write some stuff that will inspire even them.
Thank you for sharing and definitely keep it up!
Thank you so much. Actually you're the first person who said that my writings aren't weird and I do appreciate that from the bottom of my heart. I couldn't count on my fingers how many times Sun Ravel Me saved my poems lol. Lesson learned from my mistakes actually, "avoid cliches" the day Sun Ravel Me and Geke (those were the days where the two of them were active at TWB) told me to watch out for the cliches I kept that on my mind knowing that they're making my stuff don't look weird. Seriously I learned so many things. Sun Ravel Me and Geke they're my senseis.
@sunravelme and @Geke are so great and were also some of the most supportive people for me and my Steem identity in my 2 weeks here on the platform.
I can tell you, my friend, that your drive to read and research and improve is definitely going to continue to show in your writing.
Like I said, I think you'll be impressing people and even inspiring new up and comers before you know it, my friend.
Keep at it and definitely let me know on discord if ever I can help edit or be someone to bounce ideas off of. You the man!
Yeah I actually looking for someone who can help me with out submitting it on a google docs, ya know this is only a 4-5 stanzaz, why put it on a google docs thingy? Thank you so much Carmalain7 You rawwkk!
and this is an interesting writing
Thank you kindly.
deep piece man! requires more than one read... excellent entry.. so fascinating to see how differently everyone uses the dice and the theme... great work man!
My entry is below is you every fancy checking it out!
--> Everything Transforms
With love
Hart Floe
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