Superstarxtala Production #5: Dekada

in #poetry7 years ago (edited)

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Kayangan Lake, Coron,
September 2016



                    My dear, I wait relentlessly,
                 For a love that was never promised,
                    Not knowing when to let go,
                       Or when to stop,
                    Today, a decade has passed,
                 And yet here I am, still, holding on.


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The bittersweet ache of this poem! That limbo of waiting.

"Waiting" is such a passive verb, but paired with "relentlessly" it becomes an action taken, a decision, something you do rather than something that is done to you. Just that one pairing of words... the whole poem seems to hinge on that pairing. Through it, the minimalism of the other lines takes on a kind of hopeless urgency. This is expertly written, and beautiful to read. Thank you for posting it. Following :)

Hi @bennettitalia, thank you for appreciating my poem and for hearing out the message.

And thank you for the support, also followed you. ☺

Thank you @superstarxtala! Check out the collaborative poem I started, just for fun and to build community in the poetry section of steemit: https://steemit.com/poetry/@bennettitalia/steemit-collaborative-poetry-experiment

This is just a fun experiment, it's already getting pretty silly, but I would be honored if you'd like to contribute a couple of lines :)

Also, If you have time to take a look at some of my work, I'd love to hear what you think:

https://steemit.com/poetry/@bennettitalia/capitulation-a-poem-by-bennettitalia

https://steemit.com/poetry/@bennettitalia/honesty-a-poem-by-bennettitalia

Haha you're right.

Dropped two lines for the poem, not sure if it fits. 😅

And sure, I'll check out your other works. 😁

I think those lines are awesome! I like where they're taking it, I'm actually, unbelievably) in a little bit of suspense to see what happens next lol. Thanks for contributing!

I forgot to ask you - would you be willing to please upvote the post when you have a chance, so I can add your lines? :)

Sorry, I thought I already did. Hehe

Done anyway. Maybe I was too focused on devuding what to put next on the poem.😅😅✌

That is such a nice place to sit and relax. The scenery is beautiful.

That's true. To sit and relax and perhaps with a bottle of beer on the side. 😅

Philippines really has a lot of beautiful places. You should take a visit. 😅

I think about visiting all the time and maybe even retire there since the cost of living is much lower.

I think so, too. I've seen a lot of foreigners retiring here in the Philippines, especially in the Palawan, Cebu, and Bohol. 🙂

WHat area do you think is the best in your opinion?

Palawan, especially El Nido, then dont forget to visit Nacpan and Marimegmeg beach.

Although the photo above was taken in Coron. Haha

Anyway, I'll be posting about them soon. 😁

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that lake looks like a great place to go for a swim

Hi @mitchyb, it is. If I'm not mistaken, it is also the cleanest lakes in the Philippines.😁

You can look it up and perhaps it can make you visit the amazing Philippines. Hehe

It already has made me want to visit lol. I will have a look on YouTube.

I hope you enjoy when you do☺

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