An interest thought on how small things like that make us feel emotions that we have to share...

If you dont mind, small constructive criticsm (of course that is just my opinion ) - Right now it reads too quickly, it has a flow, but there is no stopping it )

Of course the use or unuse of punctuation is often the feel of the writer to pass ovcer a message, but i would use some full stops to stop the reader after some verses (plus you have used 2 comas, so you not agianst it =) )