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RE: DAYDREAMS / A Journal of Fiction #11

in #poetry6 years ago

It's amazing the way you move seamlessly from symbols to symbols, image to image.

I favor long nights on my back
looking up at the stars,
a small spring fed lake
that is miles from the trail.

You have no idea how much I favor this too!

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I agree. It is marvellous how the imagery is placed and mention, without straying from the message/tone. This is an exemplar to the "Show-Don't-Tell" rule. Inspiring :)

Thanks, one of my favorite rules.

I always work hardest on transitions, stanza to stanza.

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