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RE: The Commute - Haiku
Thanks for reading and taking the time to give meaningful feedback, you're not looking too deep at all @poetrybyjeremy. I thought it worked on a few different levels and it is gratifying to hear someone else agree. I think it is the job of all good poetry to condense meaning down into few words but Haiku even more than some other forms. To express the pictures that I had in my head writing this: it was inspired by the daily commute in my last job down the motorway where I live, creeping through traffic jams, then speeding on the less busy sections, I would always have music on the CD player 'metal box' which would make the time and the miles 'melt away'.
Now, I understand that much more! I was thinking somewhere along the lines that the 'steel boxes' where like containers on trucks. There is beauty to poetry in the interpretations. As having studied philosophy as my secondary area, I suppose it's natural for me to look deep into things. And welcome - meaningful feedback is what I'm used to doing :D