You are viewing a single comment's thread from:
RE: Ode to an Ancient Statue - Tribute to the English Romantics - Writers Block Poetry Contest Week 3
So many great verses and images in this poem @carmalain7. I love the way you have taken the form and made it sing! I find the archaic forms of poetry so hard to write successfully in myself.
Empyrean shell leaks red then blue,
Time honored lines 'cross a furled brow,
The early bird moves a mouse or two
'neath his early plow.
I particularly love the way you blend vivid visual imagery:
Empyrean shell leaks red then blue, Time honored lines 'cross a furled brow
with a more modern term (The early bird) in the above verse. Very nice stuff :-)
Kinder words have hardly ever been spoken, @raj808, thank you so much, mate!
I love that stanza and it was one that I reworked a number of times with a lot of input to get to where it is now. Much praise to my proofreaders for their help, and so happy you found value in those words!