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RE: Inner Static (I.I. Part 1)

in #poetry6 years ago

@hlezama & @d-pend,

Dan, I hate to say it ... but this comment risks overshadowing your poem. But as I keep opining, Great Comments Improve the Value of a Post.

H ... you are undoubtedly the best literary critic on Steemit. No BS.

Dan ... the poem:

no lanes of gridlocked dendrites

For me, the power metaphor in the poem was "gridlocked dendrites."

I had never thought of all the inter-connected interstates, highways and roads in that fashion but it is an excellent analogy. The nervous system of a country ... and of a culture. Sometimes open roads, synaptic connections firing efficiently, sometimes gridlocked, confused, in it's attempt to extract meaning from the mundane, to get to where it is going from the places where it has been.

This is actually a good example of what frequently occurs when I read your poetry. My mind locks onto a particular phrase and that becomes the lens though which I end up analyzing the rest of the poem. I end up reading other comments for an alternative take. I often find hlezama's perspectives and insights enlightening.

His fascination with railroads was an interesting twist. An additional neuronal network that America possesses but which is under-developed in South America. H, I spent several months in French Guinea (I suspect we tripped into Brazil and Suriname on occasion ... a jungle's a jungle and there were no signposts) while in the military and you're right ... there is a noticeable absence of railroads on the continent ... something which had escaped conscious articulation until you mentioned it.

I'd love to get together with the two of you sometime and break open a case of beer. I think we would have some very interesting discussions.

Quill

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I suspect we tripped into Brazil and Suriname on occasion ... a jungle's a jungle and there were no signposts

My wife is asking me why i am laughing so loud, she thinks it's a woman i am chatting with.
That's exactly how i imagine those "tresspassings" that once in a while become "diplomatic incidents"

Thanks for the praise.

I'd love to get together with the two of you sometime and break open a case of beer. I think we would have some very interesting discussions.

Man, at least you are in the same country (Florida-Texas, right?). If I were at least as closed as Panama, I'd figure out how to get there and enjoy some beer and good conversation. If you ever arrange that meeting, make sure someone gets a video. That would be a great post.

@hlezama,

My wife is asking me why i am laughing so loud, she thinks it's a woman i am chatting with.

Tell her it "Just Gigi" ... and there you're "only friends." (Plan on cooking your own dinner.)

There's a lot of miles between Florida and Texas ... and, on top of it, Daniel will soon (?) be off to China if my understanding is correct! Nevertheless, one never knows how paths will cross. (There's a poem in that last line.)

Quill

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