I liked this poem, good job Erica. I'll tell you what I liked about it. the imagery is well-described. For instance, in the first two lines, the imagery compliments really well, rays of sun, blazing motion, hot breeze. The content (message) is relatable.
Edit. Shortened the comment.
Lol :P To be honest man :P you got to cut the girl some slack it is her first poem :) I think it is just awesome how she did... Hehe she will be represented in our issue today. God Bless you both :P Peace and Love.
Yes, I apologise. I edited the comment (and removed a chunk of my text). I actually quite liked her work and wanted to give some suggestions, but I realise it may have appeared differently.
I apologise Erica, but, I do believe it was a good job and you have to keep going!