Thanks @maverickinvictus I'm glad you appreciated the sensory element of this poem. It was exactly my intention to try and keep it completely visceral senses-- touch, hearing sight -- as much as possible with little or no commentary. 'Show don't tell' is what I'm always telling others, so I have to try and abide by this myself as well ;-) thanks for checking it out
Thanks @maverickinvictus I'm glad you appreciated the sensory element of this poem. It was exactly my intention to try and keep it completely visceral senses-- touch, hearing sight -- as much as possible with little or no commentary. 'Show don't tell' is what I'm always telling others, so I have to try and abide by this myself as well ;-) thanks for checking it out