Yes/No Questions (free verse) - Steemit School Poetry 100 Day Challenge - Day 61, Poem 55
Hi, folks.
I’m back on Day 61 for my 55th Entry to the Steemit School Poetry 100-Day Challenge by @d-pend.
I'll be glad should you be able to read and comment.
Yes/No Questions
No bug, no rest.
No dust, no time.
No doubts, no joy.
No regrets, no bliss.
No filth, no harmony.
No complaints, no life.
No repentance, no soul.
Berkeley’s out for a walk.
Come! Take your chess set.
You’ll learn of black & white.
You’d wish you’d listen more.
You’d pity the poor of hardship.
They could not see the blessings.
So much light erased whites spaces.
Black arises triumphant in this game.
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A Personal Comment:
I started to write some verses about chess. It all went too long and confusing, and the lines were disconnected in meaning. I started to think about this problem, and that worry is what you’ll find in “Yes/No Questions", I think. Contraries need each other to exist, and so they coexist. But not all complements need to be opposites. I'll let you know when I solve it, hopefully.
Ah! Berkeley is there because of the subjectivity issue. Do as you please with him; he'll understand.
Thanks for reading.
See you tomorrow with another poem.
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Wow ... The rhythm is impressive, it's like a machine gun that affects even breathing. the contrasts and shortcomings mark this poem. Good job, @marlyncabrera.
Greetings appreciated @marlyncabrera. As part of the exercise to strengthen the links between the poets who participated in the challenge of the poetry of the 100 days in # the poetry of the secondary school, next to the professor @d-pend, I will try to penetrate his beautiful poem, looking meanings.
I chose this poem because it represents a challenge and I love it, although I do not always surpass it, but I insist on trying it.
In reference to the form, the poem is a piece of ten free verses.
"Yes / No questions" presents an achievement in the movement of contrasts, which causes a dynamic and melodic effect that immediately draws attention.
The first seven verses are composed of two adversative phrases, each one. However, we note that the first sentence of each line contains some negative aspect of the human being: errors / doubts / remorse / impurity / complaints / repentance. And, the second phrase, something positive, of value, something that enriches the human essence: rest / time / joy / happiness / harmony / life / soul.
The following eight verses change the image and address an inaccurate "you," except the eighth verse:
that suggests the idea of "someone" participating in the escen of words raised in the following verses where the revelation is given that one is in the middle of a game of chess where the black triumphs over the white, which paradoxically is swallowed by the light.
Presents itself the idea that, due to human incomprehension, light absorbs the white, which we assume to be the good things of life, giving strength to the black, assumed as evil.
So, you can think that the poem has an anthropogenic character by suggesting the development of life and human behavior and culture as a game of chess where man was invited to play, by someone "superior", as we suppose by the expression of the mandate
In the midst of this, the ideas that try to explain why the imbalance occurred are presented, but I'm not sure. It is something like that people are not careful enough and lose the signals, lose sensitivity, do not empathize with people who suffer, resulting in the gain of darkness, the black arrives triumphant at the end of the game.
I really liked the fantasy and the fabric of the poem. Congratulations, you have great talent. You are a great poet.
Very pleasingly shaped, and the lines gradually gather more and more significance as they lengthen, culminating in that powerful contradiction - or least it seems to me!