Pass through the keyhole and receive the mystery (Day 44 of 100 -- poetry challenge)
Say the words loud to the spirit of air.
Your prayers from the scroll,
incantations, your
petitions,
your soul:
O Spirit dwelling within
show me what is there
yet unseen
reveal that which is
dirty
or unclean
let me hear the chorus
obscure
that I may speak
of Abrasax
unbound
found
O Spirit come forth
of the Pleroma
see the beauty
be set free
O Spirit
find me
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Entry for Day 44 of 100 Days of Poetry Challenge by @d-pend.
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Considering "Of Waking" was the immediately prior piece, and this piece came but a few days after "Upon Entry to my Sphere," I definitely feel as if you're on a more mystical slant, for the poetry, in the last week or so, relative to when this has been written.
And Abrasax and Pleroma both have gnostic connotations, and Abrasax in particular seems tied to Sophia, which you felt relevant in the aforementioned Of Waking. So this poem is addressing a topic that the prior did not yet free you of. Then again, we don't always want to be freed of things when we write of them, and I certainly know that, with my focus on love poetry, but things we may want to dwell on more, or consider from other angles.
"Within / unseen / unclean," and later "unbound / found." On an almost purely aesthetic level, I'd have liked if the spacing between the rhymes was consistent. But this does fit into you how I came across your poetry, which was spoken word. And there what really matters is that the "scent" of a word-ending lingers by the time you reach the other, not so much where it comes precisely.
I like how the two bits are structured relative to one another. The first part ends with a colon, and the entirety of the second half is that incantation, that petition, that prayer. Is a prayer letting go of one's soul to try and intercede on one's behalf? That's a question. But when we look at Pleroma, it feels like we're going beyond occult mysticism here, to something more monotheistic, or even more unitarian, so to speak.
"The Spirit of air?" I think "O Spirit" might be a better term for it, or even "Your soul," this is something that could be read as if asking something from the world. This is asking something from yourself. From the spirit dwelling within, this is an incantation, a petition, to your own soul.
Find yourself.
Set yourself free.
This reads.
See your own beauty. See the truth.
Hide the noise we're surrounded by, so you may speak, and hear the truth you have to teach yourself.
And what else could we ask for? And who else could we ask it of, but our own selves?
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