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RE: Hope - Day 55

in #poetry6 years ago

You really went all in with the alliteration on this one! The words effortlessly roll off each other, reflecting the ease of the campfire setting. I think it makes a great contrast with the final stanza where you start to drop them and just focus on that image of the old widow longing to be included.

Very nicely done, I can feel the warmth running throughout and it does take me back to some similar family gatherings :)

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I usually add punctuation last, just forgot on this piece. Ill edit it now.

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