Criticize my happy birthday poem
Hello steemians, I'm new at poetry. I wrote this for my bff. I wouldn't mind any corrections or suggestions. Kindly proof read my poem.
intend to post this on her Facebook wall.
Epsy i into the twilight sky of friends
You are the brightest twinkle i witnessed
her embracing smile, calm as a lake
O her seducing eyes, tames any beast
No anchor can drown you in this sea
Choirs chronicle her in the heavens above
Refelcting the radiance of dancing stars
In thier crystal dome, a choir with the sun
She smolders not, her tears whisper it all
I remember this November is due
MAY parades of joyful winds MARCH to you.
Worthy of love, her warming Hands
But has failed me not, hence i must stop
A greet you in love; pleasant morning
My charming friend BELKA MAUREEN,
Beautiful in the past. Yes! Wow!
Beautiful in future, SHOUT OUT!
Most importantly, CALM DOWN!
Cuz you're BEAUTIFUL TODAY and NOW.
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