@angela.ghkh,

Thank you for writing this lovely poem. I'm amazed at how you command two languages. Did you write this in Farsi first? or is that Arabic? I feel like the english is a translation; which would explain some of the odd phrasing. Though I was easily able to understand the gist of what you were saying; I very much enjoyed your poem.

Please take this explication with all the affectionate hope that it helps your future writing.

When I read this the fifth time, I feel like it is quick, effective, and done well. The ending still pleases me every time! I love the finish where the you write, "the ground takes revenge!" I especially like it because "revenge" implies that arrogance is an affront to the very land itself.

Is there a way you can keep the brevity, keep the speed of the poem but make the climb more specific? more image laden? Is it possible to make the "when you're high" portion of the poem more specific image-ish? Like "when you're standing on the 52nd floor laughing at the weary," or something of your own? I worry that "higher than others," and "higher than ourselves" is too vague and obscure.

I'm not certain on your familiarity regarding cliche's. "to the moon" is often overused. Perhaps consider something else.

In closing, I really can't express how pleasing and fun your poem is. I very much enjoy it; enjoy the feeling the last line gives, so playful and exclaiming. Thank you again for sharing this! I can't wait to see a revision if it comes.