Silence I-Original Poem #8
Silence I
"Silence can be a wall, but it can also be a bridge."
Two souls;
In one room.
One with rain
Running down its face;
The other with the cloud
Above its head.
Tension in the air;
No words needed.
It's where despair
and agony are seeded.
Discomfort is radiating
As they gaze at their feet.
No matter how hard they are trying
Those eyes will not meet.
Silence is growing;
Now ringing in their ears.
They are still not breaking it;
Now it's toying with their fears.
Tension is concentrating in between them;
Getting closer and closer
Together.
And with no communication
They built a separation;
To last from now until
Forever.
That was part one, part two coming tomorrow.
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Wow, nice grammatical structure, well done
Hey, thank you so much, I am glad you liked, I am doing part two tomorrow, I hope you stick around to read it.
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I liked how you used the differing rhyme scheme or the abandonment thereof. I felt it aided in the separation metaphor. Good write.
Thank you so much. I tried to make it seem like the structure of the poem is falling apart there in the last stanza but to still keep some kind of structure. Honestly, I am not experienced writer, I just picture something in my head and I try to describe it. Also, English is not my first language but I'm continuously trying to expand my vocabulary.
Thank you for your feedback, I hope you enjoy my future poems as well :D