How I Broke My Collarbone {An Original Sonnet}

cathi-xx (65)in #poetry • 7 years ago (edited)

This poem is to memorialise a young man, Jason Prentice, who took his own life, many years ago, in the street shown in the picture. I only met him a handful of times but I was shocked and saddened by his actions.

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How I broke My Collarbone

Oh no way I’d submit to being caught!
(Tipsy kiss chase-twas no idea of mine.)
His slobbery kiss-I shuddered at the thought.
I bobbed and weaved; he lumbered asinine.

A turn too fast and legs derailed by drink:
Damp grass and fear conspired to bring me down.
A run in with a tree will make you think,
Thank God I never cracked it with my crown!

My colour drained far paler than the moon
And sickening pain it struck me cold and still
But better than a tryst with a buffoon,
Fates slapstick way to satisfy my will.

Fast forward to observe his sombre plight,
He’s swinging in the street of silver light.

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mindhunter (72) 7 years ago (edited)

If anyone else says nice poem I'm going to be sick!! A difficult subject to tackle indeed @cathi-xx. Top notch imagery and a great rhythm until the poem suddenly stops!! ... almost like the act of suicide itself. I'd happily read this as a eulogy. Your words are getting more condensed and stronger over time. Your also an improving poet getting well into her stride now. Impressed! Upvoted and RS. 8/10 :) @mindhunter

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cathi-xx (65) 7 years ago (edited)

Lol! Thanks, the last two lines were tough but I felt that I couldn't write about the incident without including what he went on to do a few years later, even though I wasn't kind about him in the main poem but hey, it's how I felt at age 18.

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