Waldo [Day 17]

in #poetry7 years ago (edited)

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there is a chicken
carcass in the alley,

a lost ugly ducking
who tumbled off the pallet

into a bed of satin,
frail dog on a kneeler,

sun stain around the neck
where a belt once said 'Waldo'.

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inspired by The Invisibles by @lazarus-wist.

Written for free-verse poetry maven @d-pend's revolutionary poetry initiative The 100 Day Poetry Challenge [Advanced Group] undertaken for Steemit School where @d-pend will be hosting a daily poetry show at 6 PM GMT.

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I love this it has nice ring to it

I have to ask, but is this a reference to Ralph Waldo Emerson?

And if not, is this a joke about the owners who wonder where Waldo is? :P

Now, if we look back over your poetry from this period of time when you collate all of it for a post-challenge book, I'd call this era "The Hanging Couplet Era" or "The Non-Sequitur Era."

Is there actually a good reason that this poem is not 5 lines and then 3?
Is there an attempt to make it seem a bit more absurd, a bit more unclear, by way of leaving lines hanging?
Tying the fate of the chicken to the now-comfort of a dog who once knew home?

I like painting images in poems, but it should lead somewhere.

Though I see the way it's been inspired by @lazarus-wist, but really, this feels a bit phoned in.

(And you know I say these things because I care. If I didn't, I'd have said nothing.)

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