Although I'm not a woman I can relate to this having experience my wife giving birth to our son and being the first to hold him. I like the poem.
Heart felt lost is the cost,
For me this line kind of broke the flow of the poem, not sure if this was intentional, but for me it was a little awkward.
Yes, I struggled with that line. I was trying to communicate the distress of not hearing the mother’s heartbeat. How to fit it into the pattern. Any suggestions?