My first Post.. Writing Contest ... Same First Words

in #poem7 years ago (edited)

I am brand new here and wanted to try my hand at this writing contest. Its more of a prose poem than a story but.. its a story, too. https://steemit.com/constrainedwriting/@svashta/writing-contest-constrained-writing-8-scaling-reward-system

Three sides of dissociation are channeling.

Three hospitals deep into November and I don't know where October has gone. Three words: hike into hills. Three miles into a small valley, until the path narrows so much the grasses rub against my legs. Three times, the edge of the valley meets the side of the hill. Three hours pass, and I reach the top . Three things I wonder in the hospital: I wonder how much blood has been on that floor, or if it's bad my jacket has touched the table because of the germs, or I wonder if the tubes are out of Josh. Three halls meet each other as a nice woman pushes me on the bed that is now a cart. Three spots of something unknown leer at me from the bathroom floor, where I wobble with my bare feet.

Three rooms ago, the doctor forgot the word "pancreas." Three nurses had to try to help as I joked through waves of writhing nausea, "Oh wait a minute, doctor...are you sure I should let you help me?" Three of us are ill, my friends are in other hospitals, hundreds of miles away, and I can't help but wonder if our elven magic is under attack.

Three days later, Josh calls, and says he is out of his coma, and he jokes like things are normal. Three of us still the hospital, and they have taken Mark's phone. Three-degrees-below-freezing wind rattles the fence, but I can't hear it through the glass.

Three florescent lights buzz the white walls and the top of the hill and turning hallways always lost: I don't allow myself to keep track.

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Well this paints a rather dark image in my head very early in the morning...

I love it! :D

Thank you very much for your entry! :D

Thanks , its dark but ...well maybe i will write more about it sometime soon because there is something uplifting about it for me.

If you do decide to write more on the topic... know I'm hiding in the bushes to surprise-read it :3

Edit: Or maybe I should not have told you that. Hmmm~

LOL. Its not going to be immediately because I am racing around this place trying to figure everything out right now. But it will be soon! Thank you for the interest! :)

as in: i just figured out how to look at the "replies" function so I don't miss any replies! Hence it took me a bit to get back here..

Hehehe :D I'm sure with your enthusiasm you'll have the Steem platform figured out in no time! :D

Welcome to steemit dflo.

The contest rules state:

"Write a story where you start each sentence with the same word."

We need more three's :)

Thank you for stating it on my behalf! ^^

I felt called to help out our new friend. Seeing how it might mess up fair chances in the future I should probably refrain from it though right?
Changing the whole post could've been an issue on the last day of participation without you having seen the original.
Anyway, I guess.... It is what it is^^

You did the right thing indeed! ^.^

And as for "changing" the original on the last day of participation... It might hurt, or benefit one's chances.. I guess it's their risk to take if anyone does it :p

I don't really know how else to address it, really... If I would've saved copies of the posts the moment I see them and someone decided to change them and I then judged their work based on their original work... When I would declare their post the "winning post"... it would no longer be the story I found to be best.. Ugh~ Too much brainwork for this early in the morning. :< But thanks for pointing it out. Food for thought if no less ^^

Yes that is true which is why I asked. I just started editing it thinking i was probably disqualified anyway but then i realized after doing so that I had erased the evidence ! I wont do that again.

Oh i thought it was paragraph!!!! Will do, thanks for humoring me. Excited to be here!

good job redoing this whole text dflo.

Thank you, I enjoy writing with prompts so much, I had fun trying.

I edited and reposted!! Is this bad form to just delete what was there? Or should I have made a new post? It is okay if i am disqualified due to the first one, i really am just enjoying trying to learn this place. Thank you

I guess some might disagree with completely changing the post's content, but since I haven't seen the original myself, ... well... I don't mind it at all! :D

I would, however, ask you to please change one of the tags (you can't change the first, main tag) to "constrainedwriting" and resteem (share) the original contest post.

Thank you for participating though! ^^

no problem! Still learning! And thank you so much!! :) :) I also love your cavalier judging style its just the best .

We all are, at all times ^^

Oh my, are you flattering your way to victory? :P (thank you though :3)

NOOO I am not! I am just overly excited about this place. It will wear off and I will turn it down a notch i am sure.

I sincerely hope it doesn't wear off too much with time ^^

I think you did a swell job!!! Welcome to Steemit. We love writers here! Thanks for sharing.

Thank you! I am very excited but now i got kind of overthinky about my next blog post so im just gonna try real hard to not self censor too much and just go with it.... I work a very hard day job so im saving up my writing energy for the weekend :)

I did that with my short stories. Don't feel pressured, we will be here :)

yeah i think im gonna like come out punching and then suck a little bit and then every once and a while do something good. lol

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