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RE: Steemit's Official Open Mic Judge @Verbal-D's Top 5 Entries For Week 119 (Original Blog)
Dear Mr verbal-d Thank you for promoting artist. I am quite new to live recording. You are a musician and you are also a judge so you must have a wonderful grasp on what is good or not. Could you please give me an honest opinion of my work? I know have started in music late in life but maybe you have some hints on what I need to work on. I know it is a lot to ask but I have no other person to ask. Thanks for your time.
https://steemit.com/openmic/@zeitli/steemit-open-mic-week-121-tragedy-original-song
You're very welcome, I have a fairly keen ear to detail. I would love to give you an honest opinion of your artwork sure. After listening to your entry, I must say I love that it is an original, because original music is the best way to express yourself. Here are my opinions. The song overall embodies the theme of sombre tragedy very well, your singing is like a wailing howl, and the reverb echo effect is an added bonus that enhances the melancholic and lingering pain in your singing, However, you sound very far away, and as seen in your video, you aren't singing into the mic, but moreso near it, or in its general direction. To get a more full sound, get closer to the microphone where it is almost exaggerated and work on your volume control so that you aren't overpowering when you record. The guitar playing is also a better background layer but could be balanced by aiming the microphone at your guitar a bit more and you singing louder in the mics direction, or tilting your guitar upward to the mic, or you leaning back yourself as you are close to the mic and tilt your guitar upward toward the microphone as you sing in front of it, or you experiment different angles on the mic with your vocals and guitar to find the best sweet spots of sound so that you can capture both aspects of your song to layer it properly with a resounding balance.
The singing style for this song could be improved, you tend to slide into your notes, which is fine, but when you slide into notes, your timing must be better because when you have too much reverb and echo effect, it can have a Bleeding effect where the notes begin to clash against one another in disharmony and linger for too long pulling me, the listener, out of the moments you are trying to create. Please sing with more conviction and energy, pour your heart and soul into the music so the raw emotions can take form into real moments of believability and captivating musical story sharing. When you use more energy and display more focus and passion, it will also require a higher level of breath control so prepare your lungs for that as well to transition smoothly and deliver without hesitation, without interrupting the flow or rhythm.
Also, I can barely understand your lyrics, your voice is just too faint but I have to turn the volume up really loud and when I sing or rap anything, I have a tendency to over pronounce or over enunciate so that my words come out clear and precise. I enjoyed listening to it for the most part, but definitely you have some things to work on to improve your next entry or performance.
I hope my constructive criticism helps you, and you are most welcome. Thanks for reaching out and for sharing your artwork with us.
Wow, I have read this post many times and agree with you on all points. You have given me a lot to work on and think about. Thank you so much for all you advice and honest opinion. I hope I can work things out with time. thanks again.