Steemit OpenMic Week 99 @paintingangels - Original song "Shotgun Ravens, Pale Night"

in #openmic3 years ago (edited)

Here's my open mic entry for week 99. Pretty cool we're almost to 100. This song I wrote back when i was kind of having a nervous breakdown of sorts. I don't actually remember writing it, though. Does that ever happen to anyone else? Sometimes, when I'm really out of my head I can write the most amazing things, but if I try to write something, it seems to always go to crap.

Fun fact.. I pondered straightening the pillows on the couch just for the sake of being tidy in this video but then said screw it, mainly because Waffle was lying so comfortably on top of them. You can see him behind me throughout the entire video. I doubt he ever even moved an inch.

Anyway, thanks for listening. And to all who said kind things about my last video and I didn't get to thank you yet.. THANK YOU. ♥

Much love to all of you,
♥- Serena


Shotgun Ravens, Pale Night

Ten thousand ravens came knocking,
knocking like thieves on my door.
Cold, I stared back like (the) dead tree bark
that's glued to these old breaking floors.

The maid she brought down an old casket
then she lined it with mama's old quilt
while roses were drawn back like shotguns,
draped softly here round my cold hips.

(And the raven said)
You,
You should fly, dear.
For you,
You will die here.

Strawberry pie in the oven sits,
waiting for strangers to dream
as they lie on the back porch and whisper
while thunderstorms rattle the screens.

I somehow can't seem to calm down now.
Where are the angels in white?

The man down the street he is howling
and I have gone pale with the night.

(repeat chorus)

©2018 @paintingangels (s.matthews)


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Love it! Your way with words is amazing and you have a very specific sound that is so enjoyable to listen to.

Thank you so much! And I miss you!

I'm back! At least I'm going to try and be better.
I posted today!😉

Love it! That's fun to find things written in the past that you don't remember. I think I have some of those. Or I'll find out in a year or so. But I guess when you're going through a bad moment, and you revisit it later, it just hard to remember sometimes just how bad it was. Or maybe you know it's bad but it's just not the same feeling.

Thanks, @eonwarped, I get what you mean. Almost like a defense mechanism to not be able to remember certain things. So kind of you to listen. ❤️❤️❤️

I'm so happy that you won this week's Open Mic! Loved your song and voice. Keep up the great work @paingtingangels!

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You won some Steem which you'll find in your wallet and also a 5-card packet of SteemMonster cards with your name on it you can find on SteemMonsters.com

Click here to see who won Open Mic week 99

Whaaaat ??? I am truly shocked oh my gosh THANK YOU!!!! ❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️

Absolutely stunning! I literally love you and your uniquely wonderful voice!

Thanks so much Darren, and ditto right back at ya! ❤️🍪❤️🍪

Just listened again!
It has such a nostalgic old world feel, so warm and embracing!

Awww you are the sweetest, means a lot to me that you say that.
❤️❤️❤️

I love everything about your sound Serena. ❤️❤️❤️beautiful as always.

Thanks Lilly!! I know you know I feel exactly the same about you! ♥♥♥

Weee like I said when the raven says you and rise pitch I get wee shivers of thrill. Another heartfelt song and I love to hear you live.
All the best. Love ya

Aww thanks again, Pris. Thise parts were really hard and I wish were as good as my studio recording of it with some reverb. Tickles me that you like those parts, thank you thank you!!❤️❤️❤️

Aww but if you want another version for dsound ask me or @hedac we can help enhance it a little, or any mp3 you send us (I'm learning) if you want a bit of it there, still when we have time we'd better teach you how to use the reaper thing, I mean see how you handle obs, he can teach you and you need no hardware for it. :)
we´ll get there
ohh talking again a lot... LUCK LUCK :) HUGS

Incredible Thank u so much! So classic voice @paintingangels

So nice of you to say! Thank you so much! ❤️❤️❤️

I love the style of the song and the power in those words! Love it!

Also... poop emoji pillow!

Oh Foxy! I thought I replied to this 5 days ago the day you made the comment! I'm sure I did because I was saying that I love it when people notice my smiling pile of poo pillow and I was saying you could make a cake like that .. ha ha! Well anyway thank you for the comment and for noticing my pillow. It's always in my videos somewhere in the scene. It's my recurring theme. ha ha. You can always find some crap here. :D Love ya!

I had an order last year to make emoji cupcakes. The birthday girl was obsessed with the poop one so I had to make a few of those ones too. My son went to that birthday party and this was the picture that was sent to me.

There is always crap everywhere XD Missing you! <3

I love the song and your wonderful voice!

hmmm.... that is an interesting thought

please let me be a critic over here for just a second.
i liked the piece it was totally great! i like tale songs.
heres my critique, it could have been a little more up tempo, pressing it in 3 mins would be awesome. and thats it.

you are awesome.

Thanks @franciferrer! Yeah my one big curse in life is not being able to do a fast song or a happier one. I will certainly keep trying though :D Thanks very much for your feedback, I appreciate it! ♥

@paintingangels, your song was selected to be part of the initial collection set of trading cards for the album of Steemit OpenMic.
Congratulations !!

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@paintingangels, how are you?
Please, login and claim your two cards !!
I hope to see you again in the contest.
kisses

So good! You're an amazing songwriter. Such a good song and rendition, as you say here. So cool. Great! Greetings, @paintingangels!

Hey @siomarasalmeron! Thanks so much for the sweet words. And thanks for listening! ♥

reminds me of Joanna Newsome a bit. And something else I can't place. Vashti Bunyan perhaps? A little bit of that psych folk/freak folk feel. Surreal imagery but there's something meaningful lurking beneath, like a weird dream waiting to be analyzed. I love stuff like that. Good job :)

Check out my channel for original conscious music, skits, discussions and writings. I don't have anything on DTube yet but I do on my BitChute (https://www.bitchute.com/channel/xylen_roberts/) and my Steemit (https://steemit.com/@xylenroberts), amongst many other place :)

Hi @xylenroberts! Thank you so much! And I love Joanna. "Sprout and the Bean" is one of my favorite songs. ♥

greetings @paintingangels. Yeah I remember her from the freak folk era but ddn't dive too deep into her personally. I was more of an Animal Collective and Akron Family kind of guy personally :)

such great use of vivid descriptions... beautiful delivery .. Have a great week ;9)

Thanks Gibber! I'm so happy you liked it, thank you for commenting. ♥

What a great song and performance, Serena!
Loved it!

Thank you thank you!! ❤️❤️❤️❤️

lovely. thank you.

Thank you very much ♥♥♥