Glad to hear that you are very busy which means that your health is much better!
You are a perfectionist or the old classic type of people to read the book before reading to your boys!
But how many different voices you have to manage to remember?!
How about the sound of the setting and atmosphere! How do use sound to convey a deep dark place or a frightening forest?!
It looks like you are becoming a computer GUI of a game!!

Cheers.