Killthepad challenge Week 3 - FREEDOM
This is my entry for killthepad challenge Week 3 on the topic - FREEDOM
Right when I stepped into the game, I'm never gonna give up/ this is killthepad and I'm gonna murder all competitors/ rap battle is where I test my skills, it is a litmus/ I am at the head of the table of a rap discourse
I'm a beast in this game, I beat my chest I'm a king Kong/ rap is my jungle, I'm a lion in this game this is my kingdom/ I strut my stuff, gallivanting about, rap is my freedom/ I ain't for games here like a ping-pong
I'm a freeborn, I'm a master of myself/ no one else can diss me like I diss myself/ I do and rap what I can to please myself/ I'm the master lover here and rap is my mistress
Enclosing me in a ring is where I deliver my punchline/ no one can match the sophisticated and artistic way that I combine/ lyrics that last forever, its for a lifetime/ my rap set the pace, I'm on a sublime
In this competition there is none to be compared to/ it's time for celebration where is the confetti/ let the air rain with fireworks it's time for the party/ call in all the low, high and mighty
Let the rap fire of every song burn inside of me/ even when the devil dies he is surely coming back to me/ no shackles could be used to bound and oppress me/ my rap gets admiration, it is impressing
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Yea dude, so this is cool... A couple problems that I saw immediately was the structure. I like that you put "/" to denote the bars, that's cool, but I'd much like them separated out into their own specific lines.
Also there was a lot of filler in this and not so much on the actual topic of Freedom. I think you literally only had one maybe two bars that even touched on the topic.
This is a topical rap challenge, not a battle. The goal here is to expand our writing skills in a way to where we can write about any topic given to us.
Appreciate you participating!
Thank you