Yea dude, so this is cool... A couple problems that I saw immediately was the structure. I like that you put "/" to denote the bars, that's cool, but I'd much like them separated out into their own specific lines.

Also there was a lot of filler in this and not so much on the actual topic of Freedom. I think you literally only had one maybe two bars that even touched on the topic.

This is a topical rap challenge, not a battle. The goal here is to expand our writing skills in a way to where we can write about any topic given to us.

Appreciate you participating!