Sorry it has taken so long for me to get to this!

Content is amazing.
The remains of the run down
Loved that. I enjoyed how you took basicaly the entire beggining and then mirrored it but changed certain things around where you overcoming it. I liked that alot.

The structure is a miss for me. Clear precise bars is what is needed. Some of these seem to be bars, others seem to be cut in two.

Bullies rule with fierce persistence.
Take you down with their talk yo
Your self-doubt is their mission
Then try to modify your mind so,

Should really be

Bullies rule with fierce persistence, take you down with their talk yo
Your self-doubt is their miss, then try to modify your mind so

Easier to read as a rap, and easier to work with when trying to build structure, rhyme schemes, etc.

The rhyme scheme is hit and miss. While I can clearly get a rhyme scheme, they are usually both end rhymes and the same word. Sometimes rhyming the same word is ok, like when it's part of the whole idea of the song. To bring back up the first couplet of the verse, you rhymed talk yo with mind so, and I'm not saying anything about yo/so, that's cool. Generally though when you are using simpler end rhymes like that, it's good practice to make the words before them slant rhymes, or at least similar.

It was completely on topic and I loved the read, was very fun. Thank you so much for participating in the #killthepad challenge! I will be announcing winners tomorrow!