This was dope! However, the structure and scheme for this was definitely more poetry than rap. There were a couple times where it was passing as a rap, but then it would end with some off-rhyme.

Main thing I'd want to see improved is the structure... Make clear bars like

The darkness is my throne, even Jon Snow knows it,
It is my throne even dragons, bow in the midst of it

That's a solid couplet. The end rhyme would still need some work when it comes to rap, but still would be passable.

So basically just make it more structured as a verse and keep the rhymes coming! I appreciate you participating, hope to see you drop another verse next week!