Oh thanks so much for commenting and going to the effort of reading my story @jayna - it means alot. I'm glad I achieved a sense of dread - I was feeling it as I was writing it! My son said the same thing actually - he liked the way I went back and forth in time. That was another fun aspect of writing it. I'm not involved in any writing groups - I dont seem to have the time, but I'd like to be, and am thinking of how I can re-arrange my spare time so I write as I really love doing it and always have, but I've just stopped.