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I like it as is, it reaches a wider audience not just kids.
Why would you need to tweak it?
Maybe add a moral at the end about adversity and against all odds. I would leave scripture out though. It’s hard to find books with good morals and value with no scripture. It’s like publishers think you have to be religious in order to be a good person.

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