Dear Free Writer,
Let's continue our #wewrite journey. Keep in mind this is a learning experience for all of us and feedback is important. Have fun and don't forget to read your comments, they can be very useful. Below you find the review of your publication which is part of We-Write-Lesson 4.
| Criteria | Result |
|---|---|
| What went well - 1 point | 1 |
| What to improve | - |
| Misunderstanding | - |
| Title - 2 point | 2 |
| Hashtags - 1 points | 1 |
| A flashy start - 2 points | 2 |
| Creativity / out-of-the-box thinking - 3 points | 2 |
| Original/no AI text | 👍 |
| Following the rules - 1 point | 1 |
| Bonus - right community - 1 point | 1 |
| Total max 11 points | 10 |
| Verification date: | October 3, 2024 |
Wordcount: 550👍
Bonus reason: Mr Thomas must be charming that everyone falls for his smooth talking. The question at the end is a brain breaker.
There's only one thing I wonder about: Where does all the money flow? How can it be he can't pay Andrew who is tall. Is he strong enough to strangle him? I also wonder if he is strangled because he doesn't look dead. 🤔
Poisoned by a woman? Perhaps Miss Marple knows or Jessica Fletcher does?
I wouldn't end a story with a question but leave it open. In the way you wrote this story I think it's a good solution to add some mystery because it feels you already told everything in detail. So I wonder: Do you know who the killer is?
Thank you for joining us!
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I really appreciate your review ma, the story is quite full of suspense and Andrew on it's own part is a very gentleman who hardly kills someone. Mr. Thomas was once his close friend and he didn't want to end his life that way, he believes Mr. Thomas can pay his money.
Lol, bing really dealt with me today, I was trying to create a very realistic image but I discovered is highly prohibited in bing that's why I couldn't get a picture of a realistic dead man lying on the ground.
Like you said about it being a good solution adding a mystery, I really needed to do that that's why I asked that question and refused to disclose Mr. Thomas killer.
Look at my title Three Suspects One Killer, my readers knows the suspect and there's definitely a killer among them. Revealing this killer will make Suspect meaningless in my title. I hope you understand 😉😊.
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At a certain point in life best friends know friendship is an empty shell and payment will never arrive. Who sells drugs has to pay someone as well and this isn't a world where is waited patiently till a bill is finally paid.