RE: Legacy of Shadows: The Rise of Oliver Twist
Oliver has always been a name for a very adventurous person, your story highly reminds me of Oliver Twist, a young boy with so much courage.
Back to your words here, I must say that Oliver seems to be lucky to have the professor by his side. This has shown me that Oliver's freedom can never be taken from him, because if that's the case then he won't have gotten a person like Robinhood and the professor, without then Oliver would have been arrested a very long time ago.
The admin is right, the story is long and in your own opinion you are saying is difficult to cut it short.
I think some parts in the beginning are unnecessary.
Your pictures are too much and it made me wonder if I was reading a story for kids. Bro your story will be more interesting if your readers are imagining how your characters look like 😊.
Allow us to imagine this while reading, don't show us, lol. Above all, is a unique story but I wasn't ok with the way you ended it but you tried.
I agree with your analysis,
Oh really 🤭, the story made me talk alot. Thanks for the upvote.
Thank you brother… I do appreciate the feed back. I got some idea from your post and @marito74 post and I’m thinking of re-writing this again.
Even kitty had given me some clue on what to do to make it more shorter..
Oh you want to rewrite again? Is that allowed. I guess you should write the fable story instead.
If you still want to talk about Oliver and Robinhood it is ok but changing the story won't be nice. Remember the comments on that post.
This time.. is off the contest!! Just want to give it a second trial with the few tips I’ve gotten now..
Ok
you can post your second version in freewriters. I like to see what you make out of it. @saintkelvin17 is right it's time for the fable and the film review