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RE: Legacy of Shadows: The Rise of Oliver Twist
Hi, I have always liked the story of Robin Hood and have seen many of his versions, I like this one with a modern approach, good point kid.Hood's ward, I love that the legacy continues and he continues to fight to help the underdog.
But now with a team, like a big family, it's exciting, did you think of another twist for this hero...let's see give me a hint haha.
I liked reading this and I share it
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Remark: A crime story of 550 words with a prompt is asked. I wonder if you have a tip for @sbamsoneu how to do this.
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Hahahahahahaha😂😂😂
I really need the tips… I tried to use ChatGPT to reduce it but they removed the best part of the story!!
Remove the start and the end - parts that are obvious... too much explaining, you used famous characters plus we know what corrupt is so... where's the crime and leave open how Robin died.
Is Oliver the killer, is the professor the one, the police or did Robin trip over a piece of paper and hit his head against the wall?
You see d reason, why I enjoy you as my moderator…. You always have “corrections”, that can guide me!
Thank you.. I’m doing it right away!!
Yes, you are doing it right anyway 🤣
Are you still drugged?
@wakeupkitty, I like @sbamsoneu's style, I know that writing a story based on established aspects may not be easy for everyone but he tried, he has his own style and it made me smile, his story moved me.
Friend @sbamsoneu, something that works for me is the timer, use it, then you can fix it a little. Don't go overboard with the decorations. You had to keep in mind the healer, the piece of paper and the police touch. Maintain the expectation, imagine that you are the reader.
These are great advices and you know if he deletes parts of his story (too many words) most likely it shows and the paper can be dropped somewhere.
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After reading the link u sent about the origin of Robin Hood, it shows that you even know more about him than I do and I won’t mind collaborating with you to complete the story..😊😊
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