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RE: Distribution Curve (Hardfork Series Contest)
The final version is even more wonderful. I love the way it unfolds, and the protagonist's transformation. This line is so terrific:
The little girl was doing the same, as if they were both poorly trained spies engaged in embarrassingly bad surveillance of each other.
I love how the little girl helps her to evolve!
Thanks @jayna! I really appreciate all your help with this too. The little girl was the brainchild (literally) of a far more talented writer than me, @authorofthings, who rightly pointed out that Miko needed more of a catalyst to change. The credit should go to @authorofthings. All errors and mistakes are mine.