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RE: Mizu-no-oto-every-image-has-its-haiku-edition-43-english
You imagined a well-wishing element and full of mono no aware. Your toriawase haiku is well constructed, and in the second element one perceives the solidity and grandeur of the house that rises alone in the middle of the park, as the word stands alone in the verse, highlighted by kireji
I saw the house, as solid, as you say, so established and I thought about human work and the possibility of inheriting it to deliver it in succession. I saw generations born on the property.
Maybe that's why the image of the stork gives circularity to my exercise, explaining it.
Thanks for the comment, @marcoriccardi encourages me to continue exercising