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RE: I Just Wanted Him to Be Happy -- My Response to the Pop-Up WeWrite Contest with Sandwich Prompt
I loved how thorough you approached the problem. It almost sounds as if you have extensive experience in this line of work. ))) Just kidding. Great Job!
Actually, I have cared for aging members of my family since teen years... I DO have a certain amount of experience, including the fact that you can't leave things out!
That's great! I was just surprised at the thoroughness and knowledge of the entire maneuver that the wife demonstrated. In view of that knowhow, I couldn't help but ask you a question of why did she wait so long?
In other words, it seems that the husband's bed-ridden condition as well as him being so grouchy and selfish lasted already for a while. At least, he deteriorated for quite a while thus accumulating the abuse imposed on the wife.
So, she could have had the thoughts of getting rid of him for a while already. More so, considering how masterfully she conducted the operation of eliminating him, she could have done it a while ago as well. And yet she didn't do it all these years and made a decision to go ahead with the plan only today (meaning at the moment when the story is narrated.)
There must have been some trigger, one last drop that broke the camel's back, that made her go for it. And I failed to see that trigger in your story and in the story of @wakeupkitty.
When I read the prompt, the character didn't impress me as being capable of such a decisive move. The way you read the prompt you've apparently come to a different conclusion. What was your train of thought in regard to that matter? What was the trigger?
Cheers!
You'll have to read just a little more, into today's freewrites, to find out how Captain Ironwood Hamilton figured it out ...
https://steemit.com/writing/@deeanndmathews/weekend-freewrite-2-15-2020-single-prompt-option-continuation-filthy-rich