Hook -my offering to the Monday prompt of the 5 min freewrite by @mariannewest
It was love at first sight. I was dosing in the sun when I saw you, all sharp in your red velvet coat and feather adorned hat. Your raven Hair gleamed onyx rippling like water down your shoulders, down your back. I knew right then and there I had to have you, no other would do. Like fog I slid through the water, just a bit closer. You smelled divine, like amber, like musk. You reached in your pocket bringing forth your glittering offering- tick-tock. Our eyes met and you screamed, screamed and screamed. Startled I reacted a might violently, please forgive but you hurt my feelings you know. In the end beloved there is nothing to worry about, we shall be together in one way or another. Or one bite at a time …
Writing notes:
I actually got to conclude this one in time I am pleased :D This was written for the 5 minute freewrite by @mariannewest to join in on the fun go Here, todays prompt was hook.
(Image credit Dave Renike and a portrait of the fair jubilee made by myself turned into this here universal truth meme)

art courtesy of @PegasusPhysics
*Like fog I slid through the water, just a bit closer. *
Oooh, that's nice.
:)
The love that destroys you. This was so vivid and loved the description of the subject of desire.
:)him maybe but the crock seems to be very sustained by it ;)
Awesome freewrite! Your post was nominated as a Freewrite Favorite and was featured in our weekly Freewrite Favorites this week!
Thank you :)
You know, I have this condition where my eyes light up when I find a good dark story? It just happened ;) I really, really liked this. I'm often fascinated by the dark side of love, by how horrible it can sometimes get and this spoke to that part of me so clearly.
I was actually quite curious where you were going with the love at first sight thing....Impressed.
Anywho, I'm in charge of delivering the new prompt, so here ya go:
https://steemit.com/freewrite/@mariannewest/day-194-5-minute-freewrite-tuesday-prompt-sweater
:)
This is AMAZING!!! No wonder you were suggested for the freewrite favorites! I love your descriptions and the twist of the story! Perfect!
Thank you for your kind words :)
Very intense emotion! I was pulled through with the vivid descriptions. Awesome writing!