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RE: She Came in through the Kitchen Window - Day 577: 5 Minute Freewrite: Monday - Prompt: window
a nice story @carolacca! something you can understand but a lot evolves reading so that you can't stop until the end !! at first I thought she was a crazy woman who would hurt those poor boys, or a sick woman who didn't know what she was doing. But then the truth: he is running away from her husband. But is it a kind of shock that pushes her to be a mother and take care of others or iis it her clever plan to hide in a new home? (sorry I use the translator so maybe I didn't understand correctly !!)
congratulations for your vote curie and thank you to share with us
Thank you so much for reading and commenting!
A better writer than I would have had those four boys in terror of the strange woman in their kitchen. Was she planning to torture and dismember them? They would plot her demise... kill her in self-defense... only to find out later that she was running for her life, and thought to save herself by helping others (and lavishing on others the love her husband and ungrateful children rejected). But I would never write the story of her getting killed like the Arabian Nights fable of the Falcon who died trying to save His Friend The King, and that makes me a weaker writer. The fable is so memorable, so epic. Had the falcon lived, would the story have even half the impact?
www.english-for-students.com/falcon-saved-his-friend-the-king.html
The King patiently bent down and refilled his jar with water to drink. When he tried again to drink the falcon again fluttered and spilled the water in the ground....
Another version names the king Genghis Khan; another, Sinbad; ultimately, the message is the same:
the King cried out in sorrow and lament for having slain the bird that had saved him from death
http://www.mythfolklore.net/1001nights/payne/sindbad_falcon.htm
I understand what you mean, sometimes in writing you must have the courage also to be cruel, ferocious, to kill. but in your case it is just the opposite: it seems that the story goes in that direction, instead the truth is different. you are able to amaze the reader and this is fundamental. keep it going!!
Thank you @road2horizon for your insights and encouragement!
I love you for gettiing it - let the great ones break our hearts with tragedy. Victor Hugo's Quasimodo finding Esmeralda dead and later their two skeletons, intertwined, are found. Dr. Zhivago, dropping dead as he catches sight of ----. The king and his falcon. My mission, my life's quest, is to find the happy ending - and believe death is not the end, but the beginning of a new adventure. (I hardly dare hope, and I want to believe, but skepticism is hard-wired in my brain. Maybe that's why I've had chronic daily headaches since childhood!) Sorry, I digress.
Thanks again!
YESSSS, looking for a happy ending is good for health and life!
it will be a coincidence but I too have always suffered from chronic headache that made me go crazy until I dropped everything and started traveling. Let us free the mind and our dreams !!!
Ooh, the solution to your chronic headache was TRAVELING? Whoa!
I'm a firm believer in de-stressing and un-complicating our lives.
A half-dozen Mensa-IQ people, years ago, decided to buy $30,000 houseboats in Boston Harbor rather than pay that in a year's rent, and John C. McCormick is now writing a book about this eclectic group. The ambassador from Tonga (whose wife published a cookbook for cannibals) was the one group member who didn't last. He fled the country for reasons I've yet to learn. But I digress! I'm glad you're free of headaches and living the life of freedom you dared to imagine - and make happen.