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RE: The Perils of Living and Sea Level

in #freewrite5 years ago

I wonder if you wrote all this thinking of "Sea level" or you just wrote whatever came to mind filling a certain volume with writing and then thought of how to connect it to the topic in the last two paragraphs.

I was especially impressed with one long sentence and thought to myself "If I paste it into Word? Would it complain?" I felt excited, kind of like that boy in the movie Matrix who thought that Neo will jump from one building to another one from the first time. I pasted the sentence into Word and behold the miracle... No, not quite. Word complained at it as a run-on sentence.

Although to me, it sounded good and natural. Like a woman who, dressed in a sophisticated way, just came from the ladies' bathroom, where she powdered her nose. Like a lullaby that you enjoy listening, but cannot remember at the end of it what was at the beginning.

I wonder whether this long sentence is an expression of similarly long and winding thought or several thoughts that are crammed into one sentence by the power of will despite their complaints about claustrophobia.

I also wonder if this "spread over the surface of vision" pattern of thought is the typical pattern of female thinking or it is something individual like a signature or a fingerprint.

I am writing a story about a girl who was in love with her teacher and wonder if her thought pattern should be just as amorphous and spread over the surface of the vision to sound genuine.

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Well, lot's of questions here and no question marks? I guess they're all rhetorical? ;)
And, most difficult to answer because they're both and not either/or. Like, yes, I do think I may think typically female, but also that I am my own voice too.
I know I do write in very long sentences, but just match my writing as closely as I can to the way in which I talk &/or how the piece sounds read aloud. There is a musicality and very particular cadence to the way in which I read my work too.
I went to the prompt, typed it on my page, set my phone timer for five and went for it. I live at sea level now, so included the day and all of its linking to this idea of seeing level--
I did go over the limit, but don't mind if I feel I am in the groove, but all together took no longer than ten. Hey, matches my time in the waiting room!
Thank you for taking the time to read and comment and I do hope that your book comes together nicely :)

Cool! Thx for answering. It's very telling how you notice all those things that going on around you. I always have a problem with it because when I walk I either concentrated on what I am thinking about or looking around for something in particular, for example on filming the birds.

Good luck with your freewrite!

If you are constantly walking on water,
am I constantly diving?

Hmmm, now that's something to think about.

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