The Other Side | Day 195: 5 Minute Freewrite: Wednesday - Prompt: the entryway
It was a famous place in the village, or rather, infamous. Stories about it has been told to everyone ever since they were children. "Do not go there." His mother had always told him during bedtime stories "You will be taken by the dark and never comes back."
"Does anyone never comes back at all , mommy?" He had asked, dark brown eyes filled with curiousity.
"No, never." His mother answered automatically then paused "Well..."
He tilted his head and leans closer, wanting to know more. " When I was small, someone came back, they could no longer speakand a few months later she died."
He gasped, chubby fingers overing his mouth. "Is she your friend?"
His mother shook her head, "No no... she was a few decades older than me but..."
"But?"
"Never mind Allen, now you go to sleep okay." She kissed his forehead and tucks him in.
He wasn't able to sleep easily that night as he kept thinking about it yet once the sun came up, he had forgotten.
Now when he is right before the entrance, the stories came back to him again and he couldn't help but stare at the two centuries old tree that bends in a way that it shaped an entrance like arch.
He is eighteen, not a grown man yet no longer a child and maybe he should be rational and not risk anything but his child like curiousity came in full blown in him. How he mnaged to reach the place, he didn't know. It was a mere walk back from the grocery, and by now he should be at home giving the bag of eggs to his mother. Yet here he is, right before the entryway that people had warned others about.
There is nothing weird on the otherside, just plain old grass, If he steps around the trees, he will still be standing on those grass but it will be different if he goes under the arch, or is it? Slowly, he raised a hand, his fingertips touching the bark of the tree.....
I kind of want to go on writing this and sees where it takes me. After writing this thoough, I kind of find it similar to Stardust or Narnia?
anyways, this writing is from the prompt here : https://steemit.com/freewrite/@mariannewest/day-195-5-minute-freewrite-wednesday-prompt-the-entryway
You have a minor misspelling in the following sentence:
It should be curiosity instead of curiousity.Ahh - @grammarnazi: why do you bother correcting spelling on freewrites? These blogs have a philosophy of just writing or whacking down as much as you can to a time limit. A good freewriter does not go back and edit for spelling and punctuation. So go pick on someone else lol!!!
Interesting that you're the "grammarnazi" but missed so many other errors. It is a free-write for one, but more importantly, if you're going to do something, then be the best at it. You pretty much suck as a proofreader.
This story is excellent. It makes me want to keep reading it and find out more! Even though you had to stop. Keep up the good work!!
thank you so much!! I will work hard to write better and better <3
mysecondself01 featured you in the pay it forward contest . That is how I found your post
than you so much for visiting this post!!! <3
This is an intriguing story and I too would like to see how it develops. I found you through the #payitforward contest. You were featured by @mysecondlife01. Congratulations and best wishes.
I would like to see how it develops too ahha... thank you lots!! thank you for reading
Love the story and am curious to see it continue :)
Congratulations, you were featured by @mysecondself01 in the Pay it Forward Curation contest!
Thank you!! 'm asking my brain that too~
thank you for reading
haha I understand that completely. It will come when the timing is right :)
I just wanna informed that I wrote the second part if you are interested!!
Oh good! I'll have to check it out :)