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RE: Day 274: 5 Minute Freewrite: Friday-Prompt: squash
Hello friend! I see you got haikued, ha! It's a refreshing exercise, isn't it? Altough it's not so easy to say what you want with those limited verses (some say that in English should be 3-5-3 .. metrics are just the tip! of the iceberg). Good first haiku, keep practicing and they will create peace and harmony in your soul 😉
Ciao my Italian friend! Thanks so much for reading my first Haiku! That means so much to me since you are the master of Haiku's and you were the one that got me interested in doing them. I couldn't believe how difficult it was but I loved it. 3-5-3...impossible! I will definitely keep practicing. Grazie again! : )
What's more important is the mood, the kireji and the kigo.. in an haiku there's no ego but just sense of wonder for what happens around us. I did one 3-5-3 .. it's the one with the blue jay feather. It's not impossibile in English, a quite immediate language. Traditionally, the haiku is composed of 17 on/morae (sounds let's say) and not syllables. Ah.. I'm not a master but a very simple beginner hehe .. cheers!
Please forgive me for missing this message my friend. I just read your Blue Jay haiku and you made it look so easy to do with 3-5-3. I understand now, about the mood, especially with this poem. I felt so bad that the blue jay lost its feather during the storm. Yes, the mood came across. I haven't been practicing because I can't think when I am not feeling well or have a migraine. But all is good now and I am excited to begin practicing. Thanks again for your time and help my dear Italian friend! Grazie! : )
Win, I'm glad you're well first of all. Take the haiku as something that, once crafted, can donate you inner peace and harmony. Forgetting your ego and immerse in the wonder of the world is regenerating 🙂
Thanks @f3nix! Ah, I love what you wrote about the haiku and I will definitely keep that in mind. That is what happens to me when I am out for a walk in a park, absorbing all of natures wonders and the rest of the world is gone. Just me and nature. I sure do appreciate you taking the time to help me. Grazie my Italian friend and I hope you are doing well also. : )