You are viewing a single comment's thread from:
RE: Mom's Cousin Lenna the Tart - Part 4 -Day 593: 5 Minute Freewrite: Prompt: carnation
Oh no poor Sandy - I am a Sandy!
I kept her nameless because she has lost her identity and is on her way to finding it. Yes, this is the woman who descended on the college boys. Did she give them her real name? Should I keep her separate from this woman? I seem to have an arsenal of women who suddenly decide to revolt in my freewrites. (I almost said "revolting women." That could go either way!) Thanks for reading and commenting. And go, go, write, don't waste too much reading other people's freewrites!!!
hahaha! I meant no offense! I found Sandy self righteous and condescending, which might have something to do with your putting her big words in quotation marks, and made me think Doris-for-now was recounting them sarcastically and feeling judged by Sandy. And might have something to do with my high school boyfriend's marrying s woman named Sandy. Who knows what goes through a reader's mind? Or an audience member's? What matters is that the character is originally genuine (I learned that from you and your essay on originality), and you are the master of that.
I wrote one today! And I liked it! It has seemed impossible for me to write fiction for a while now, like I would never ever be able to do it again. Thankfully a story came out today that I am delighted with. xo
You wrote! and you like what you wrote today! YAY!!!!!
For sure, "Doris-for-now" (oooh, I like that! I'm stealing this little literary trick from you!) was feeling judged by Sandy. And feeling kinda less-intelligent for not rattling off all those textbook terms like Sandy does.
But I love unreliable narrators.
And I keep hoping that readers will bear with the narrator and root for her as she starts coming to her senses and developing this sense of "agency" she learned about from Sandy (who, like an older sister, is a little bossy and overbearing).
I like that Sandy supports DFN in making choices that perhaps are less easy to make in DFN's world than they are in Sandy's. And maybe just one HPA violation that helps Sandy see she is a pompous ass sometimes? idk just thinking out loud.
Absolutely no offense taken. I am too much like Sandy. Right down to bandying about the big vocabulary. Drives some family members crazy...