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RE: Day 106 - Five minute freewrite - Prompt - The smell from within - Broken part 2- A continuation of Lola's story
Ooof... that is some gritty fiction right there! You really pulled me into the scene. I could feel the invasion of the too-bright daylight in her eyes (even though you didn't describe that, it was implicit I guess lol), taste the dry cracker crumbs, smell the ciggies... and the vomit. Damn. No idea where this is going yet, but I'm hooked.