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RE: From "Ragnarok Conspiracy"; Part One, Chapter 8 (draft)
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Xavier turned around quickly and as he turned, in the corner of his eye, a glimpse of a dark shadow in the canopy of the very tree where Xavier had tied his canoe too, just minutes ago.
The phrase "he saw" needs to be added somewhere, and there are two possible places to fit it.
- Xavier turned around quickly and as he turned, he saw in the corner of his eye, a glimpse of a dark shadow in the canopy of the very tree where Xavier had tied his canoe too, just minutes ago.
- Xavier turned around quickly and as he turned, in the corner of his eye, he saw a glimpse of a dark shadow in the canopy of the very tree where Xavier had tied his canoe too, just minutes ago.