Ora et Labora
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5 years ago in #finishthestory by tristancarax (66)
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Aannnd this is where you regret for your vivid imagination! 😂
You will be assimilated by the satanic robo-monks. This would make a perfect B-movie (mind its a compliment I love them)!
Anything to make the reader toss their cookies is what I'm here to do. haha.
We're going to be stars with our movie!!!
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Some delightful scenes and set dressing here <3
feels like a call back to the opening metaphorical threads pulling at fingers. This is like a biblical MIB
and of course with a hint of the great banana deity, i love it! Revelations comes to life! You build well of the out of character appearance as a diving off point, and take this in such an unexpected direction, ahhh i do always love your entries!
This bible stuff is true. I thought everybody knew. 8-) - bible MIB, this makes for an interesting movie.
I totally wasn't thinking of the bananafish, but I've been here so long that it comes out.
Their ranks swell as another falls
Looks like The Beast is upgrading with the times. 😱 Great work in building the suspense all the way to your payoff, Tristan!
Using the disheveled and dirty tunic of Thoram's to give the readers an understanding of the unsettling change to his personality was a nice touch. It both gave us more depth to the man along with moving the story to your unexpected ending.
This was our second clue that there's something rotten beneath the surface and it's a shining beacon to the readers. If your story was a horror movie, we'd be hollering , "Run you fool!" at the screen. 😁
The cum-flowers were definitely something.
There was this room I used to practice in. For like two week the trash had not been taken out. The room started to smell like cum. It was pretty nasty.
That was a good way to make your practice unattackable from outside interferences!
And you know the fool always does what the audience screams for him not do.