Hunt More Precious than a Green Stone

in finishthestory •  21 days ago

Here is the beginning of the story. Your mission, should you choose to accept it, is to write an ending within the 500 word range. After you have got it written and have made your post, leave a link to your post within the @bananafish realms here (also, this is where you can find the contest rules). The best of luck to you, Brave Story Teller.

Hunt More Precious than a Green Stone
by @tristancarax

I watched Belinda getting onto the cable car that was headed up the hill. Quickly, I ran and jumped onto the back as the cable car began to pull away.

I would have had trouble with the ticket agent if it wasn’t for the gun in my hand and the badge on my belt. He backed off with a quiet stare. Following my gaze, he was bewitched by Belinda’s beauty. He darted after me. She had this effect on men of weak mind. I would have fallen off if it wasn’t for the bar slamming up against my back. Tossing the man off the trolley, his body cracked and thudded as he rolled down the hill. A blood-soaked street ...

I turned my attention back to Belinda. Fuck! She’d vanished. That fucking prick! I’d been hunting down this woman for weeks with no luck. I’d have no clue as to where to scour next if it wasn’t for the letter I found at my feet addressed to me.

It was 3 a.m. when I arrived back to my flea-infested motel. A new record for me as the days without sleep turned into weeks of nightmares. Insomnia is a bitch.

The Captain at the precinct had kept me longer than expected. He was viscerally upset when my employer had spoken to him over the phone. ”What do you mean ‘set him free?’” the captain protested. ”This man of yours just killed a man, for no apparent reason, with a slew of witnesses around,” his voice rose a little louder, becoming squeaker, ”and I’m to let him go?” His eyes darted in my direction. I saw him about to crack. ”What am I supposed to tell the press?” My employer ensured him that he’d take care of the press if the precinct did its job and labelled the body bag with the tag ”DNI” (Do not investigate).

Reluctantly, the Captain released me. My employer had ties to power most would never dare touch. Those who dared to challenge him were usually found with a couple missing body parts in the middle of town or possibly at the bottom of a flight of stairs. ”Unsolved” murder/suicides were abound. This place was beyond crooked.

I sat down on the bed. I finally had time to get to the letter I’d hidden in my trench coat pocket that was hidden beneath a pocket. This pocket had saved a few useful items in the past when I’d gotten into trouble for the blatant disregard for life.

Other than the obvious clue ”Addressed to you, Detective,” she had left a kiss mark, formed from the blue lipstick she wore.

I slapped my neck. ”Fucking fleas!”

Opening the letter, I read:

Dear Detective,

I know why you don't sleep at night. I've watched you in your half-hazy sleep toss and turn. Yes, I've done my research. You thought I didn't know about you? No matter.

Pay attention.

Your awakening is coming. You first have to chase this mouse a few more times around the block before your mind will be free enough to see that the shadow and the light cannot be without the other.

You have been to the Garden. Follow the smell. Seek the maid who is more precious than a green stone.

Your employer is banking on the life you've lead up until this very moment.

A sweet kiss, Detective.

There was a knock at my door.

Finish the Story

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@scrawly - Again, thanks for the gentle push to create my own post for this story. I'm a truly delighted that you thought it worth the effort.

@calluna - thanks for the editing. This piece became much better with you on the job.

@bananafish - So happy that I could have one of my pieces featured as a story prompt. This is the very first one and I hope to have more going up soon enough.

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What an exciting starter for Bananafish's 2019 contest. The story is easy to read and engaging at the same time, and there are so many ways people can follow up this one with their own take :D.
Nicely done, tristan and congrats for your curie vote ^_^.

Fun challenge!


I hope I get to read your entry.

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Awesome. I hope to provide more quality content for you and your followers to enjoy. Thanks for the support.

What a joy, truly, to start the New Year with this rich, creative piece. I won't tell you where it takes me, because that will be the surprise (I hope) when I write. I do hope I can live up the the originality--and roguery--of the story. Congratulations, @tristancarax!
Just resteemed--I want everyone to read and try their hand.


I can’t wait to read it!


When is the deadline, exactly? work already.

OK, so here's my story: *Where Are You, Belinda?. I hope you like it. Tried to capture the tone and period evoked in Hunt More Precious Than a Green Stone.


@agmoore, You'll need to post it on the BF official site. I did this post because scrawly asked and said I might have a shot at getting a curie upvote, which happened.

I can't wait to read it.


OK. I did it. You deserved the curie. Never know what you'll come up with. Very original :)


I'm glad you got it to the right place.

This piece came out a an early freewrite I did when I got back onto this platform.