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RE: The Package (Finish The Story #49 Entry)
Very interesting your end, a leap in time and explain the reason why to take the child every time she made the delivery. Maybe she could end up being a fundamental part of the gang. On the other hand, you could include some indication about making her nervous not only by the situation of the exchange but also by doing something illegal.
Good one! 
Ooo good note, thanks for the feedback but this has turned into another one of those stories where I have somewhat messed it up conveying the plot I intended. She isn't doing anything illegal ;)