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RE: Finish The Story - Week #46

in #finishthestory6 years ago

there's a lot of great lines here. I think next time you should consider using dialog tags, " " when characters are speaking. Like this:

"Of course." His voice trembled a little.

It makes it easier for the reader.

I liked the ending. It caught me by surprise! He placed dynamite to blow them all up! This version of Leitner has him be an honest witch-hunter. RIP

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Thanks, @dirge for your words, next time I'll do it so. Thanks again. And abour Leitner...yes, RIP.

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