RE: The Package (Finish The Story #49 Entry)
(yeah, everyone seemed to think she was an art thief and that it doesn't quite make sense because i have told it badly as opposed to being something else... but thats good feedback still, i can see how i could have used more words on the ending and less on the build up to tell a complete story that felt more fitting for the first half, so thank you <3)
wait... you left these comments without reading!!! hahaha :p i would say that breaking and entry with actual theft is a slightly different league to illegal reproductions, but then i guess that is a matter of opinion, and i can see how you might see them an interchangeable <3
ahhh now thats good to know, and that's why i wanted to check, cos I was genuinely going for the opposite, the criminal preferring to have her settle the debt with her art; choosing to either let her live in the house for free, or actually pay her rent for her, in return for her sculptures.
Yeah, that was the one i got :p i thought about it when i used it, and googled it to make sure the definition i was using was the top one, as i though some people may not know it. I did oo and ahhh cos it isn't a widely known word, but i figured it has enough precedent with gangster movies for most people to get it, just really curious at to what the others are. I always like to know when i am using one so i can evaluate if it is the best choice given the audience. Well expand away my dear! Love to hear what you think!!
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I did yah Wingus! I read it! Otherwise, yeah it is easy to slip inbetween the two and it is interchangeable. <3
Yeah, I like stories like that as well as yah described yer story; an interesting parallel can be drawn to the real-world were actual artists starve to get by as artists. Of which the criminality of the landlord/bank can be comparable to the actual art thieves there, using every inch of their artwork as a means to generate revenue to get fat off them. After all, landlords are leeches.
I think we expanded as much as we could, mój Ukochany!~ But good rumination here!~
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Hahaha I know, I was joking cos you said you'd have to read it to say which way you read it :p I would still argue that practically, in terms of how it feels to do them, and the steps involved in committing the two crimes are very different, but on the legality, I can see how an artist would feel as though something copied was 'stolen' even if the original wasn't but kinda irrelevant, as there is no thieving in this story anyway :p
I wanted to play with the debt, and what had started as a sculpture handed over to a scary man to settle a debt had become more 'indebted' - if i had more words I could have used some on showing the difference in her fear, no longer scared for her life despite the obvious dangers, but for him being disappointed in her art. Society let both these people down but in harry, shannon finds her own strength, and in her, he finds his own weakness. It didn't come across so well either but at this point probably safe revealing the meaning I had tried to put in there.
Hmmm okay, I have read it back so many times trying to find the others, and the shannon related ones, but I shall have to leave it as one of the many mysteries of you. <3
I know, but I like busting jokes up more than playing into them. Otherwise, piracy of a copy never really stole the original; just like making a copy of something like a ROM or a .EXE file or a MP3 or something like that. So I agree with yah there, but art thieves Gal Cal and their magical ways!~ :p
Oh I know that, but yes these were less pronounced in the actual ending entry itself that I thought we were accepting that as an undercurrent of the story. Otherwise, yeah more words would've fleshed this out massively and given this a wide expanse of things to actually cover. (One of the many reasons I did expansion posts to begin with!~ :D)
~Good, let's leave it as a mystery~ <3