RE: Dark Road. Finish The Story Contest - Week #49
Ooo this is a good ending. Shannons rising fear and panic building tension, the last look at the baby as she hands it over, her emotional reaction afterwards, really underlined by her turning off the CD. The way her panic immediately intensifies in the silence is wonderful.
The way she watches the tail lights drive away, and the final snap into action, the damn breaking and the adrenaline surging through her. Many people leave it too late to rectify the mistakes made in fear for ones self. I like that your Shannon didn't, and took action while she could.
The phrase fortune favors the bold is very true in this story, her sudden brave action, bumping the van and causing a crash but the baby being okay.
The final line here is just such a wonderful note to end on
entering the darkness of the road in front of her, a path as unknown as her own future.
<3 so perfect!
Thank you for your analysis. I appreciate it very much.![](https://steemitimages.com/640x0/https://i.imgur.com/PHcIjhh.png)