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RE: Young John, Adrift in a Pirate Ship: Finish the Story Contest #35

in #finishthestory6 years ago

Oh this is such a thoughtful take, so many young teens, well, children, were pressed into service and there is so little record of what happened to any of them. The ending is so touching, the young lad, real name unknown, reflecting on his fate, but able to accept it, while overhead fear and terror reigned. I just had this image of a sinking ship of panic, with a single bubble of calm, holding out against the storm. By keeping the boy more anonymous, his memories that of most young boys faced with such a moment, it feels like the story of countless nameless, children, lost, and forgotten by all but their mothers, who never knew their demise. Really beautiful!

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Thank you so much. I know this piece is rather an odd duck in the midst of rousing pirate tales, but it's what I imagined when I thought of a sea battle. I have a little problem understanding the glory of war, of bloodshed, of battle...for some reason I can't get past the casualties. Apologies for being serious :)

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