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RE: The Package (Finish The Story #49 Entry)
I was so happy to see it wasn't a body in the trunk. But it still had the feeling their could be bodies everywhere if the slightest thing went wrong.
Shannon's enjoying her work too, that was a twist from the opener where she was so nervous. Well done!
I really wanted it to avoid the dark / high fantasy roads, and go for something more realistic that still gave her good reason to be nervous so very glad one thing in here worked at least a little bit.
Ooo thank you for that feedback. I know myself that telling people things didn't work is hard at the best of times. I had actually tried to carry the nervousness and weight of emotion through into the second half and only really have it as an afterthought that as scary as the experience was, it drove her to keep creating as opposed to it seeming like she enjoyed doing this. It is good to know where doesn't quite fit with the first half, so that is something I can think about for the future. Thank you <3